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This ambitious film was of mixed success and the production issues you confronted did effect the sense and quality of the finished story, which was a pity. The opening sequence was strong in terms of the introduction to character. It was also funny and well conceived as a ‘Tarantino-esque’ piece of script-writing, but after this scene there was not much chemistry between the central characters. As the story progressed, there were some ‘odd’ moments that didn't quite connect with the unfolding narrative and left the viewer a little confused. Technically, again there were some issues with framing and continuity (eye line) as well a sound. The music was too loud in the mix. You did well, given the circumstances, to complete the film and this was a creative attempt to draw inspiration from the ‘Pulp Fiction’ scene, however the quality and technical proficiency let it down and in the end the result was a little disappointing, given the strength of you pitch.
This is an average piece of work for this stage of your craft development.
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I believe that the feedback was precise and straight to the point. I also think that when our lecturers watched our end product they were able to notice what went well and what didn't go so well. Therefore, this feedback was the incite to what could have been better.
In our drama piece we used many dialogue throughout however, the use of music in the background was too loud to understand the piece and in this case I believe it makes the audience loose track of what is going on. I agree with the fact that the drama had focus on the 'fountain' but loss track after the scene changed, but this was done in a way to show the non-linear sequence. I strongly agree, that my group and I could have taken a different approach in order to keep the audience intrigued and not confused because the plot changed within the drama from one to another which left the audience curious. One of our lecturers mentioned 'our drama should have continued a sequence from the fountain scene' which suggest our piece could have been more stronger in terms of the synopsis. (Roddy Gibson: 2013)
Whilst receiving feedback, other lecturers mentioned that there should have been a structure and flow from the main scene. I think as a group we wanted to create a drama with events that arose from anywhere but the structure did not fit well after watching the post production. One positive outcome was that it had potential in the beginning and we should have focussed on developing that main scene further to anchor the audience. Some of the shots were done quite well however, the eye-line shot was a bit awkward and off as the character looked directly into the camera which bought something to think about next time we consider extreme close ups.
This feedback session was very unique and gave me an incite on how to improve certain areas of filming and processing ideas of short drama's.
Catch You Later Dohnuts !!! =]
